The Storm Rages On

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A lightening strike in the night
The Prompt this week was Thunder and I was immediately hit with inspiration. It has taken me all week to hone this flash fiction and I hope you all like it. 

The walls shook as the front door slammed. My heart jumped into my throat.

He was home.

I put on my mask and smiled as he walked into the kitchen. But something had happened, he glared and the anger in his eyes burned my skin. I fought back the tears.

"I told you the drive needed clearing!" He said.

Shit.

He left the kitchen and headed into the lounge. Not wasting a second I darted out of the kitchen and hurried upstairs, making sure to keep my footsteps light. I closed the bedroom door behind me and as it clicked I froze. Holding my breath I listened for him coming up the stairs. Nothing.

"ANDREA!" His voice boomed from the lounge.

My heart hammered in my chest as I looked around for somewhere to hide. The wardrobe was small but tucked away in the corner. He wouldn't look in there. I pulled the doors open, climbed inside and closed the doors. I shuffled into the corner, wrapped my arms around my knees and prayed that he wouldn't find me.

"Andrea!" He shouted.

I heard his heavy footsteps as he stomped from one room to another looking for me. The storm was brewing and it would make landfall soon.

"What is this crap? I'm not going anywhere!"

He shouted from the bottom of the stairs. A moment's silence and he ran upstairs; footsteps like thunder raging inside the house. The bedroom door burst open. I held my breath.

Please don't let him find me. Not again.

The bedroom door closed but I couldn't bring myself to check. My heartbeat thumped in my ears.

"I won't be back." He called.

The front door shook the house again and I let out a breath. I clambered out of the wardrobe and inched the bedroom door open. I peeked out. The house was silent.

I creeped downstairs. My foot landed on the carpet at the bottom and I sighed. As I walked towards the lounge my heartbeat settled. I glanced in and stopped dead.

His cases still sat in the centre of the room.

"Hello Andrea." He smirked.
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22 comments:

  1. Oh my word...so well written, my heart was in my mouth!

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  2. Wow, the tension really mounts in this, it's brilliant! I could feel my pulse rising as she went back down the stairs. Thanks so much for linking to #ThePrompt x

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    1. Thanks Sara. My pulse was racing as I wrote it, I took that as a good sign. ;)

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  3. Unnerving and menacing - I thought this built tension really well and the final line was a nasty shock. Nice take on #theprompt too!

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    1. Thank you Maddy. I love having that final twist at the end. :)

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  4. Brilliant piece of writing. I really jumped at the end! Quite a terrifying portrayal of domestic violence, made all the better by not showing too much and instead letting the anticipation do all the work. Fab :)

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    1. Thanks Sophie. Domestic violence isn't always about the physical and writing it is very difficult. Not writing the physical stuff makes the reader imagine. Far better that way. Thank you again. xx

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  5. That was really scary. Very well done in such a brief piece of writing. Great interpretation of the Prompt xxx #ThePrompt

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  6. The poor woman! Reminds me of the fear that I've witnessed in relatives over the years. Very powerful piece of writing,well done #ThePrompt

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    1. Thanks. That fear is almost a bigger part of domestic violence than the physical stuff. It plagues the mind, forever.

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  7. I really enjoyed this - great pacing and tension. He scared me! (Sadie Hanson)

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  8. That sent shivers down my spine. Very well written #theprompt

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  9. Oh so much tension in this and that final line was quite a shock. Very powerful piece of writing.

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  10. This is incredibly well written Morgan. The hint of physical violence is so well portrayed, yet the reader knows very well that it hasn't been a hint in the past. What's more, the emotional side comes across too. The tension was almost unbearable for me... #ThePrompt

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    1. Thank you Carol. I purposely left the violence out, it adds more when it's not there. :)

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  11. TERRIFYING! I read this a couple of days ago and had to shut the browser because it made my heart leap into my throat. I'm there with her. Excellent writing, Morgan. x

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    1. Good grief sorry about that Chrissie! Didn't mean to scare you so much. :) When I wrote this piece I didn't think much of it to be honest but after so many wonderful comments I may have to adjust my judgement of it. :) Thank you Chrissie.

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