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Last week was hectic, my diary was full. The first three days of the week I had appointments which meant no writing time. On the plus side I had planned to write something for The Prompt and Prose4T.

At the hairdressers, while surrounded by chatting women, I wrote two poems. With my notebook (paper not virtual) an dpen I wrote the words that were in my head. I planned to type them into the computer later. Unfortunately that's when the tech-gods decided to stiff me with a malfuctioning iMac. The rest of the week whizzed by in a blur.

It may not be amazing but I wanted to share my poem with you. The Prompt last week was 'Shine'.

Shine


Make-up on and hair all done
Check the mirror one more time
Going out to see everyone
Got to make sure you shine.

Girl at home, alone and sad
No make-up and hair all gone
The pain inside is getting bad
But she will tell no one

You're out with friends drinking wine
Music loud and boys nearby
You smile and laugh, glad to be fine
To live your life you'll try

The girl at home sends a text
She's thinking of a friend
Closes her eyes and thinks 'what next?'
As oblivion descends

Your phone beeps and you glance down
She's grinning up at you
"Goodbye my friend and don't you frown,
DON'T be sad or blue."

Tears trickle down your cheeks
Her fight was lost today
You know she has been ill for weeks
This was the only way

"Shine!" she said long ago
SHINE is what you'll do
SHINE for her and not be low
SHINE your whole life through



12 comments:

  1. Don't you just love/hate technology? Fab when it's working, but intensely frustrating and time consuming when it goes wrong.
    To say I enjoyed the poem doesn't seem right, but I did. I liked where you took it. Such a sadness, but hope too.

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    1. I don't usually suffer with technical issues but this was a bad one. I'm just lucky everything was backed up.
      When I first wrote this poem it was slightly different and I didn't like my ending as much. This felt much better, like you said "sadness, but hope too."
      Thanks for stopping by and commenting. x

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  2. What a beautiful poem. I don't know whether it was part inspired by an overheard conversation in the hairdressers? But I can imagine this could be the result of hearing snippets and people-watching... #WhatImWriting

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    1. Oh thank you Carol. It was partly inspired by being at the hairdressers and having hair done but not from anyone's conversation. Thank you for stopping by. xx

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  3. Lovely poetry! Really vivid imagery.
    Hope your iMac starts working properly again. They're a pain when they aren't doing what you need them to do.
    Thank you for linking to #whatimwriting x

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    1. Thanks Chrissie. The iMac is up and running now, hopefully it will stay that way! x

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  4. Heart-wrenching poem although I was glad of the uplifting ending. Good that you were inspired in the hairdressers - on the rare occasions i remember to book an appointment and manage to get there I usually just read a trashy magazine! So frustrating about the imac - hope it's behaving itself now! Thanks for linking to #WhatImWriting

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    1. Thanks Maddy. I go to the hairdressers fairly regularly and have got into the routine of taking a notebook and research materials with me. Most of the time I can get a little reading done. So far so good with the iMac, fingers crossed it continues. :)

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  5. This is a wonderful poem, I love the back and forth, very emotional and intense. Love how you ended it, with such a positive message. Thanks so much for linking to #ThePrompt x

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    1. Thank you Sara. I do like to try and get emotion into the things I write, it just 'feels' right, you know? It could've gone the other way but it felt better with the positivity. Thanks for stopping by. xx

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  6. What great discipline - taking advantage of some down time in the hairdressers to write. I will try that next time I get my roots done! I liked the poem - the emotion in it felt very real. x

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    1. Thank you. I find it really easy to work at the hairdressers for some reason, I'm able to switch off more if that makes sense? Perhaps it's the knowledge that they're are no little ones around. :)

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